Editing OTS: Focus Group Feedback

M2U00783 from Sophie Mace on Vimeo.

Above is the video of the focus group we did today, we decided to show it too our peers as we wanted critical/technical feedback and thought they would be most appropriate.
Afterwards me and Emily watched over this video and I made a note of all the improvements we needed to make:

As you can see once we made these adjustments we ticked them off

• As one of the constructive criticisms was that the titles looked like the ending we altered this by adding the titles over the wedding shop scene: 

• The second was that the gun shot was too short so we tried to overlap and that didn't work so we played around with it in several ways and the sound has now improved
• Thirdly, some of the shots lingered a little too long so we went through and shortened the lingering ones which now makes the entire OTS better
• Lastly, it was said that the music pieces being three different ones meant they should overlap and flow into one and due to difficulties we've removed the music piece that was in the titles and have rearranged the two left.

Now the improvements have been made, here is the second cut:

Silent Temptation Cut Two from Sophie M on Vimeo.